It’s just like in real life – that guy you avoid at networking. People banging on endlessly about themselves is boring. It’s a sure-fire way to turn people off.
So WHY do so many businesses do it in their writing?
It’s the single biggest reason that mediocre, ineffectual and boring copy exists the world over.
The truth is that people are interested in themselves. They are looking for a solution to the problem they have. And if you want to your words to spur them into action – to call you; meet with you; buy from you or anything else – you’ve GOT to make it all about them.
Here’s a quick Facebook Live session on “Using You, not I and We” – from over in our FB group, The Copywriting Project!
It’s true for everything you write – emails; blog posts; sales and landing pages; social media content; articles; brochures; client proposals and every other word your business uses.
And it’s especially true for your website copy, because it’s toughest there. It’s natural to talk about your business on your site – your products; your services; your team; your history and your experience. But talking about yourself is unlikely to compel your reader to do what you want.
It’s an easy, easy trap to fall into.
Luckily, there’s a quick and easy check:
- Look at the stuff you’ve written. Especially your website copy.
- Count how many times you say ‘you’.
- And then count how many times you use ‘I’, ‘we’ and ‘us’.
How are those numbers looking?
It’s about your reader. Your words need to speak directly to them. So make sure you’re using ‘you’ at least twice as much as ‘I’, ‘we’ and ‘us’.
And then when you are talking about your business – how can you re-word those sentences, to make them all about your reader instead?
Like:
“We have been established for 25 years”
So what? Your reader couldn’t care less that you’ve been going for 25 years. They care about getting what they ordered on time, because they need it.
So flip it to make it about your reader:
“You can trust us to deliver on time, because we’ve served thousands of happy customers for over 25 years”
Now you’re using ‘we’ to PROVE to your reader that they can trust you, to give them the solution they need. Spell it out and tell them what your 25 years’ trading means for them.
Or how about this common one:
“Our team pride ourselves on our reliability”
So what? Your reader couldn’t care less what your team pride themselves on. They just want someone to solve their problem (let’s say a leaking tap).
Flip it to make it about your reader:
“You can rely on our team to turn up at the right time, on the day we agreed”
Which is all your reader really wants to know. They just want the damn leak fixed, in the easiest possible way.
So when you DO use ‘we’, ‘I’ and ‘us’, you’re talking about your business in a way that shows your reader why it matters and why it’s of benefit to them.
So yeah! A short and sweet blog from us this week.
But it’s possibly the one thing that can have the BIGGEST impact, to drive the action you need from your words and grow your business.
And if you want to play a really fun game – count ‘You’ vs ‘I / We / Us’ on your competitior’s websites. Chances are you’ll see that if you can master this, you’re already several steps ahead of the game…
(For more like this, join us over in your free Facebook Group , The Copywriting Project. We’re sharing everything we’ve learnt about copywriting – so you get practical tools, tips, inspiration and support to use in everything YOU write!).
Until next time